Draft Edit of Film

Below is the first draft edit of our groups film. We decided upon the title 'An Apple A Day' for the film which I feel works very well as the films based on a doctor/patient scenario.

I think our film works well, but there are a few things i would like to change to improve it. When watching back the film I feel its a bit long winded and a lot of the content could be taken out to make the film a bit shorter. The story has a clear start and finnish, both of which work well, although I think the main content of the film is a bit dull with not a lot to keep the viewer entertained. I think that this could be improved by adding additional content, for example the doctor being rushed for time whilst a patient feels they require all the time in the world. This would provide some tension that could keep the audience interested, as opposed to a simple, boring conversation.

The other thing that I think needs improvement is the editing. The blur effect comes over the screen instantly when it appears and I think it should come into effect gradually and smoothly in order to give a better effect of the patient coming in and out of consciousness. The patient could also seem more realistic if I had used a voice which made me sound more ill.

In order to correct the film to be how I would like it, there would be no other option than to reshoot the film. But with film potentially being an area that I'd like to progress into this is something that I'm considering doing providing I have the time to do so.